This is my narrative story
LOST IN THE WOODS
“Wow I wonder what the woods are like?” Kylie says to Nicki.
Kylie and Nicki were both 18 but Kylie was older. They grew up together for 18 years.They were close friends, nearly sisters.Nothing could come between them.
The two girls Kylie and Nicki went travelling and as they were travelling they found these woods,.They both decided to camp there.So the girls walked through the woods and found a clearing to camp on.So the girls set up there their camp site. When they finished setting up their campsite they both went for a walk.
As they were walking the weather got darker with mist rising from the night and a foggy sky with a bright clear white moon.
So the girls grabbed their torches and walked around trying to get over their fears of the darkness. While they were walking they talked about their memories growing up and found sticks and wood for there their fire they could make. As the night grew darker and darker, they thought about heading back but……
Roar! Roar! “Ahhhhhh what is that?”they both screamed.“Bears” Kylie screamed.As the trees swished and swayed they seen saw a sign saying bears.They both looked at each other in shock.‘‘We’re in a bears area” Nicki screamed. “Shhh! ” Kylie says to Nicki. So Kylie and Nicki stood there puffing their breath and shivering with goosebumps coming among their body.While standing there, the bears come came out from beyond the trees, so the girls ran and ran and ran.After running they find found a clearing.
After all that running they decided to stay in the clearing.
They were lucky to stay in that clearing because they had berry trees for them to eat.“Lets light a fire, with those sticks,”Kylie said.
After lighting the fire the girls were wide awake eating berries staying out of sight.As morning hits, the sun is drifting in the bright blue sky.“Its morning!” They say.As the girls get walking trying to find their way out of these horror woods.They come beyond the trees and find their way out,“We’re out,” they scream.As they come out of those horror woods they found their path home and talked about what happened when they stayed at the woods.
What I find tricky are. . . . . . . . . . . . . .
Past tense
Getting Ideas
Use Interesting words
What helped me most with my work. .. . . . .
Success Criteria
WALT.
Hey Ebony, Something that I like about your post is how you added your Narrative writing to your class blog, and I like how your writing is always easy for people to read. I hope more people reads your writing. :)
ReplyDeleteNice work Ebony really like the way you told us how you understand the things and what you don't understand maybe you could sound out the sentence and see which one make sense.....Maybe you could use a bit more interesting words instead of and or then
ReplyDeleteNice work Ebony really like the way you told us how you understand using things and what you don't understand like using past tense,getting ideas,and using interesting ideas were the hardest thing that you had find hard.
ReplyDeleteGreat gob Ebony I really like how you wrote about being lost in the woods. I really enjoyed your story so much. One thing for next time is putting wow words in you story.(w.i.s) from wailun
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